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:iconguei-girl:
Guei-Girl Featured By Owner Edited Nov 26, 2015
You know, I don't mind if a villain or an ugly monster character is in a loving relationship of any kind, but why do fangirls like you wimpify villains and make them act completely out of character? It's a fanfiction pet peeve of mine. 

At best, Long John Silver is an anti-hero antagonist, not some gushy, weepy little Care Bear. Have you actually sat down and watched Treasure Planet for more than just the art style?

At best with these stories, make the love interest an anti-hero or villain protagonist for once, instead of the tired old goody-goody Pollyanna Sue who makes the villain good and makes that villain a mere shell of his/her former awesome, wicked self.

Sorry, I just had to get that off my back. 
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:icondisneyfan-01:
DisneyFan-01 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2015  Hobbyist Filmographer
I fail to understand your point.

John Silver is an anti-hero, yes.  A pirate who is turned good for the sake of a young man who shows him that there are some things more valuable than gold.  In fact, in the sequel PC game, John Silver has turned privateer for queen and empire, fighting off pirates and other enemies. 

But where in my story do I make him a 'gushy, weepy little Care Bear'?

No 'Pollyanna Sue' or 'goody-goody' has turned the villain good because John Silver is already good in my story.  True that for the story he does some intentions on the wrong side between good and evil as a hired hand, but he realizes his mistakes when he sees all the wrong things he did and is back on the good side as privateer again.  As a reminder, my story takes place at least four years after the explosion of Treasure Planet.  Silver is no longer a 'wicked villain'.  And within the film, we see his charm towards women as he shows it off to Captain Amelia and the possibility that he has the reputation of a lady's man when Amelia insults him to keep his 'flimflam for his spaceport floozies'.

Besides, now that his life time of searching has ended and the life long obsession of Flint's trove is gone, don't you think a guy like Silver should try the next best thing and find a woman to love ?  A man of his age should be at the point of considering retirement, but if he does, I'm sure we wouldn't want to spend the rest of his life alone.  If so, he has to win such a woman's heart with his charm and gentleman ways.  Especially since, according to the storyline of the deleted and shelved Treasure Planet 2 film, Silver had a love interest but lost her because of his obsession with Flint's trove causing him to become the fierce pirate he was. 
Therefore, he has been showing off his old charm to my character Marina Seadrift hoping to win her heart someday and earn her love.
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:iconguei-girl:
Guei-Girl Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2015
Still, you need to improve your writing and actually make your character less of a Pollyanna. Give her some realistic and believable flaws and weaknesses. What makes a character likable is that they have both positive and negative traits and not just one or the other. It only makes sense as a writer.
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:icondisneyfan-01:
DisneyFan-01 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2015  Hobbyist Filmographer
Marina started out as a true Mary Sue, I can admit to that.  But she has been through many changes through the years.  What improvements would you recommend?  I'm all open minded on things as such. 
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:iconchantalurina:
Chantalurina Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011
A few of my friends insisted that I look you up, not really sure if this is a good or a bad thing, but never the less, here I am :P I'm probably just going to lurk around for a bit and get a sense for what everyone's so hyped up about. I really hope some of the bad press isn't true.
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:icondisneyfan-01:
DisneyFan-01 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011  Hobbyist Filmographer
Well, if you heard of me from ED, everything they say isn't true.
I can however admit that my character is a Mary Sue, but I assure you that I'm doing everything I can to make her better in the written story I'm making.
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:iconchantalurina:
Chantalurina Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011
I've heard things about ED, and I'll admit I've looked at it, but it is really harsh. I try not to judge people until I've actually seen their work.
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:iconsaxima:
Saxima Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011
I haven't read your story, but I saw some of your uh . . . [not sure what to call it, I'm not mean and I'm too lazy to troll, I wanna make this short] . . . art, I guess, on Encyclopedia Dramatica, you know the drill.

Anyway, I read somewhere that Sora's not in your story, and of what little I have read of it, it's a Kingdom Hearts based deal. Y u no have Sora?
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:icondisneyfan-01:
DisneyFan-01 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2011  Hobbyist Filmographer
Well, ED is all lies.

And no. Sora is not in my story because even though my story is based off Kingdom Hearts, it is not Kingdom Hearts. I mean, traveling to different worlds and saving important people is main thing that is most like Kingdom Hearts, but everything else is way off from the game.
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